Today, cannons have come along way from the self destructing cannons of the Chinese, to nuclear weapons, and machine guns. Though cannons are still used today, and are as sturdy and as accurate as can be, we have moved closer to nuclear weapons during the Cold War. The Soviet Union and the United States battled Nuclear War during a large part of the Cold War. They were locked in an arms race, and were hand in hand as they both invented new and different types of atomic and hydrogen bombs. Machine guns also came to be because everyday more and more are invented, one deadlier than the next. Though we would not like to admit it, weaponry is, and always will be a large part of our society. Throughout the century, our knowledge of this topic has grown, and today we withhold deadly weapons that could wipe out the entire earth in a matter of a few hours.
About two or three of the sentences in this paragraph are run on, so please try to fix that. Also in you first sentence you should change along to a long because the word isn't used correctly. Over all I felt this paragraph contained a lot of god information, however I feel that you could have added a little bit more information about this centuries cannons, because you did have a lot of information from other time periods.
ReplyDeleteGreat Work! Another grrat paragraph, with more great information. Also i am so happy that i got a chance towork with you!!!
ReplyDeleteyour information and pictures are good but the words and the background make it kinda hard to read. The title especially.
ReplyDeleteThanks for all of your comments, I have revised my paragraph and fixed my run-on sentences. I have also changed my background to make my words more readable.
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